Thursday, October 8, 2009

55 Flash Fiction Friday - Retribution - 10/8/09

Each week G-Man of 55 Flash Fiction Friday entices us to compose a story using exactly 55 words. I challenge you to give it a try.


Timmy’s “step-dad” was drunk again. He could hear the blows, his mom’s pleadings. Tomorrow, dark glasses, makeup, and sleeves would cover the damage.

Cesar’s words: “neutered dog equals better dog.”
The monster would pass out soon.

Timmy made a practice swing with the 7-iron. He eyed the driver, smiling grimly. "Let the big dog eat".
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13 comments:

  1. Brian MillerOctober 8, 2009 at 8:18 PM

    whew. tight 55. i work with kids that have been abused...i imagine many of them have dreamed these words at some point.

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  2. Alice AudreyOctober 8, 2009 at 9:23 PM

    Oh boy. I suspect that will wake him up, Timmy.

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  3. OrionsbowOctober 8, 2009 at 10:06 PM

    Man. Powerful stuff. A final solution. And Martina sang, "...roll the stone away, it's Independence Day". Sometimes the "RIGHT" thing is not the "BEST" thing. Thanks for a different look at justice.

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  4. AnonymousOctober 8, 2009 at 11:26 PM

    Powerful and frightening ~ for all concerned. Well delivered.

    My 55 is up HERE. Enjoy your weekend.

    Chef Kar

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  5. clean and crazyOctober 9, 2009 at 5:39 AM

    Reminds me of a past life. great 55

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  6. Head CookieOctober 9, 2009 at 6:51 AM

    Very emotional post. Have a great weekend. My post is up

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  7. g-manOctober 9, 2009 at 7:25 AM

    FORE!!!!!!

    Hehehehe...

    There's our Rick that we know and love...EXCELLENT 55!!!

    The true gist of the challenge!

    Thanks for playing, and have a kick-ass week-end...G

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  8. Dr.JohnOctober 9, 2009 at 8:05 AM

    Great 55
    I had a friend who hit his father with a baseball bat. This reminded me of that.

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  9. Reverend Michael KilgoreOctober 9, 2009 at 11:35 AM

    Great one! Or should I say....OUCH!!!!! mines up...

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  10. Maude LynnOctober 9, 2009 at 5:23 PM

    Marvelous!

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  11. BubbieOctober 9, 2009 at 10:50 PM

    Glad I found your blog. You don't look in your 50's at all! I wonder what compelled your Flash 55.

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  12. ForgetfuloneOctober 10, 2009 at 8:47 AM

    Wow. Really conveys a mood.

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  13. Christy WoolumOctober 11, 2009 at 9:04 AM

    Retribution.... excellent 55. I am always concerned about the Timmys in these violent relationships.

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