Wednesday, January 28, 2009

Three Word Wednesday - 55 Flash Fiction Friday - Caress, Jagged, Ruthless - 1/28/09

The prompts for Three Word Wednesday (caress, jagged, ruthless) conjured up a woman that every man has known. My initial jottings formed an exact 55 word image. That never happens. It usually takes a lot of wordsmithing. I left my first draft alone. I hope you enjoy it.

Her caress was both velvet and the jagged cut of a serrated blade.
A wound that would never heal.
Her love was equally ruthless and tender.
He now understood the close proximity of pleasure to pain.
He knew she was a succubus, but his soul ached for the sweet danger she brought into his life.

19 comments:

ThomG said...

I do know this woman. So, I have to ask, how did you like the being limited to 55 words? I do the Fiction in 58 thing, my own creation, and I find that it helps me draw out detail in the least amount of words. It also helps in my real gig, as a journalist, to write tight.

myrtle beached whale said...

The 55 Flash Fiction is my favorite link. It challenges me because I tend to be a bit verbose. Also, the host, G-Man, always visits and gives supporting comments as to your submission. I highly recommend it. I enjoy combining it with the Three Word Wednesday as it gives me a jumping off point. Plus, I am lazy.

Redheels said...

You know a woman like this, or is this fiction?

I love trying to tell a story in 55words. And as you know it is harder than you think it will be.

Loved your post!

Anonymous said...

I think this is a very interesting look inside the mind of a man. Actually it answers a question I have often wondered about. Why do men love b*@#^$s? Perhaps it is because we, as the public at large, don't see the tendar side readily and really wonder why a man would put up with "that woman". I have seen it over and over again. Perhaps it's time to hone my serrated side...mayhaps I would find some happiness...co

Lucy said...

now there's a dream you won't want to wake up from!
great job with both prompts Rick.

Tumblewords: said...

Duly impressed with your skill at 55 Fiction...The story reveals a strange truth...

paisley said...

very tasty little offering there rick.. i really enjoy that 55 style....

bunnygirl said...

There are men who are like this, too, sweetly and innocently cruel, like a child. You definitely stirred some memories!

Fledgling Poet said...

Yes, there are both males and females like this...and it is fascinating to see how easily they can attract willing 'victims'...lol. This was an excellent read!

Michelle said...

Loved this!
I'm gonna try the 55 words again this week. I agree w/ Thom, it helps draw out detail in just a few words!

pjd said...

This is nicely complete. It shows both sides of a single coin, but you also see the entire coin in the process.

floreta said...

excellent!! i love the 'succubus'.. very seductive charm.

G-Man said...

You may claim to be lazy... But you are one talented MOFO!!!
Excellent 55 MBW...
Always powerful and thought provoking. Thank you so much for your support on Friday.
And thanks for directing some awesome contributors my way.
Have a Great Week-End...G

Mona said...

Ah Sado- masochism...what else could those three words produce??

But wait...have you checked Lucy's 55ve?

Btwn, I added the Angie Aparo song to my playlist too!

Akelamalu said...

Isn't that great that your Three Word Wednesday effort morphed into a 55! Well done!

Mine's up too. 55 that is!

MIke Kilgore said...

Hey-great 55!My first time here-I linked over from Galen's. I have one up if you like

Mojo said...

Sounds like one of my ex-wives.

Actually, I'm wrong. Doesn't sound like her at all.

But 2 outta 3 ain't bad.

Lulda Casadaga said...

Well, I think I had some lovers that could fit this 55 description...nicely done!

Sepiru Chris said...

Spot on, MRB!

I can't drive 55; don't think I can write a story that lean either, but I might try.