This week's 55 Flash Fiction Friday offering uses the prompt "distraction" provided by Lena, a loyal reader. In fact, one of the only loyal readers that is not my daughter. I am doing something a little bit different this post. If you want to hear the piece read in the author's monotone voice, here it is.
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Distraction
He awoke in agony
Choked by the stench of expended gunpowder
His comrades lay motionless
He needed a distraction lest the pain would drive him mad
A pretty, barefoot, girl in a sundress
Her hair shining in the Carolina sun
Her smile beckoned him to her
When medics found him his lifeless face was smiling
Thursday, October 29, 2009
55 Flash Fiction Friday - Distraction - 10/29/09
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9 comments:
wow. intense 55. at least he died smiling...perhaps she will find him on the other side.
mine is up!
Dude. I'm speechless. How you come up with these things I don't know. Anything I write that I think is good tends to ramble more than is necessary. I edit time after time. Yet you seemingly sit down and bang out such intensity and depth using only a handful of words. It's a gift. Oh yeah, I think the sundress is a gift from God.
Sad.....but WOW too. Very intense visual from your words. Wow...just wow.
Have a terrorific Halloween tomorrow---
My 55 is a two-parter this week...
Trick or Treats HERE
Intense. Hopefully not too true.
Regardless of what you say, I think your writing is Top Notch!
This My Friend...Was one of your Top Two!!
Excellent 55 Rick!
You Rock The Entire Eastern Seaboard!
Have a Kick-Ass Week-End...G
Alice: All too true.
G-Man: This seems to be a consensus. I have gotten some really good response over this one. Either my writing is improving or I have dumbed-down my readers.
Sad. But the smile said it all. A little comfort amid the atrocity.
Great one! Explains well how people cope with the things in life no one should even have to imagine. Think of a happy place. Excellent. Love you. Carly
In many cases the best medicine lies between our ears. I visit the ocean...in my mind...when things get the best of me.
Great imagery!!! Made me think of WWII. clo
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