Wednesday, February 4, 2009

Three Word Wednesday - 55 Flash Fiction Friday - Illicit, Nerve, Crumple - 2/4/09

Once again, I have combined the Three Word Wednesday prompts with the constraints of 55 words presented by G-Man at 55 Flash Fiction Friday.
These words immediately conjured up this image.

The illicit affair was against his values.
But he could not resist her.
He planned to end it tonight, but had lost his nerve.
He picked her up at the usual location.
Suddenly, his car was crumpled by an unseen vehicle.
As he lost consciousness, he saw the driver smile.
Or was it a grimace?

24 comments:

Redheels said...

Great post. It gives me several ways to think about how the affair ended, but I will never really know for sure.

Tumblewords: said...

I think it was a smile. Good short.

Anonymous said...

Me too Tumblewords. It was her other lover....the one that mattered. Perhaps she lost them both?

Mr. Ramblings, pehaps a smidge more? co

myrtle beached whale said...

Unfortunately, 55 words does not allow me to spoon feed the entire story. Was the driver her husband? His wife?, Hired? Another lover? A religious zealot? A really bad driver? Is he dead? Is she dead? Did the airbag deploy? Were they wearing their seat belts? Was it a Garp situation? I hope I left it thought-provoking.

Lucy said...

it was thought provoking, but I assumed it was satan, coming to get the immoral lovers.
good job!

ThomG said...

Wicked! I'm a big fan of "the dark side" (if you've not noticed) and this is one terrific piece.

Anonymous said...

Absolutely terrifying picture at the end. Hope my subconcious doesn't bring that image back in the night. Great story though. Love ya, Carly

paisley said...

oh you dirty dawg!!! that was excellent and i loved the twisted ending!!!!!!

gautami tripathy said...

I love deep dark posts! Very speculative...


illicitly intertwined

Fledgling Poet said...

It's interesting to read each person's interpretation...I thought the other car was 'karma'. It was very thought provoking and definitely left me wondering!

myrtle beached whale said...

Fledgling:

That is an interesting and totally plausible interpretation. I, too, am enjoying peoples takes. Although I don't think the Devil would want to curtail such sinful activity.

M as in Mint said...

His last ever trip seems to be a guilt trip...Good read!


Scary Story

g-man said...

PERFECT!!!
In all aspects PERFECT!!
What more can I say?
I always get a quality 55 from you MBW. And thanks for sending me some great writers last week.
Have a Wonderful Week-End...G

MIke Kilgore said...

Very thought provoking! Hmmm, even the best of sneakers, eh? Got one up too!

Shadow said...

noooooo!!!!! such a promising start. i'd have rather seen his resistance crumble, heeee heeee heeee. good one!

Shadow said...

p.s. i really eajoy your smirkings...

Mona said...

Well...sometimes it is never too late & sometime it is just the opposite...

That could have been her husband or his wife or so many other people imagined!

Ps. Your Granddaughter is so cute. Congratulations!

gel(Emerald Eyes) said...

Terrific. Strong and captivating.
(here via Sun. Scribs) I haven't tried FF or 55, but I'm seeing it more and more around the net and my curiosity means I'll have to give it a whorl soon. (Will be tough for me who is long-winded, even in comments. :D)

Akelamalu said...

Was it really an accident???????

Great writing!

Mine's up too.

Anne said...

thanks for comming by my blog and leaving a comment, i really appreciate it! and oh lordy ur granddaughter is so cute n precious

Daily Panic said...

so we may never know who the driver was, but I like not knowing. It adds to the twist.

myrtle beached whale said...

OK, next week's 55 may include the conclusion to this story. I had one in mind and I guess I owe it to those that take the time to read my stuff.

Donnetta Lee said...

Oooo. Now that was creepy. Very cool combining the "3 word Wednesday" with the "Flash 55." Nice job! D

jadey said...

I love this post. Very hot