Saturday, March 8, 2008

Writer's Island - Rising - 3/8/08

Dining at my favorite restaurant
Appetite rising
I saw her across the room
Interest rising

She was beautiful
Libido rising
She was dining alone
Curiosity rising
She smiled at me
Temperature rising

She waved in my direction
My hand rising
She got up and walked toward my table
Blood pressure rising
She passed my table
Questions rising
Her perfume lingered
Sensorium rising
She sat down with the man at the next table
Disappointment rising
I realized she was not smiling and waving at me
Embarrassment rising
She was not my type
Defense Mechanism rising
I found myself alone
Reality rising

Like she was going to be interested in me?
Self-criticism rising
That night she was in my fantasy
Imagination rising

The scenario was totally different
Auto eroticism rising
We were entwined
tumultuous uprising

27 comments:

Greyscale Territory said...

This is a "smirk" post indeed, but how true!

Just loved it!

myrtle beached whale said...

Thanks for visiting. I am trying to get back into the smirk mode more. I am more comfortable there.

Jane Poe (aka Deborah) said...

I like the self-analysis in this one! I think we've all had these moments arise ;-) Peace, JP/deb

Remiman said...

that should gt a rise out of a few people. ;)
rel

Little Wing said...

I loved it, you are soooooo witty Rick!

keith hillman said...

That is so good! Sounds a little familiar too!

Anonymous said...

I bet you have molested many women alone with your lotion

tumblewords said...

Who knows? You could find yourself writing ads for...for... hmmmm, for...
Funny post! Haven't we all been at least partially there?

KB said...

Hey, thanks for the visit. Love the post, I'll be back for more.

*wink*

paisley said...

way too funny... and i was willing to accept her asking if you were so and so's dad!!!!!!

myrtle beached whale said...

Paisley:

That is so funny. I almost went that way.

Fledgling Poet said...

Very clever...and the photos/pics were perfect. :~)

Selma said...

Excellent. I experienced something similar on a blind date many years ago. Let's just say that the guy I had my eye on was not the guy I had been set up with. Disappointed arose and abounded. Still, it was a good night. I enjoyed this!

giggles said...

You are amazing....wonderful, honest and hilarious. Definitely a standing ovation....or should I say and uprising! Loved it!!

Hugs Sherrie

anthonynorth said...

That was fun. Loved it. A sense of humour in writing is excellent.

Robin said...

Love the progression.

Crafty Green Poet said...

excellent narrative

Anonymous said...

The way your mind works is wondrous. I love your posts. It is like I am there on the sidelines watching.

gautami tripathy said...

Rising and rising!

get going

LittleWing said...

great post!!!... i luv how life has so much to offer.... it's all in the little details often overlooked...

James Goodman-Horror Writer said...

that was great stuff. A story that I think most of us can relate to un some level or another. Very cool...

rebecca said...

Rick,

I don't think this prompt was difficult for you at all! This was excellent and you made it seem so effortless. I like the progression. Another witty post.

Redness said...

Excellent, you mastered it well, rising to the occasion ;)

ren.kat said...

been there, done that. too often.

bellamocha said...

Oh, So Clever! Great style of writing, I really like it. And yes, haven't most of us had moments like that?!

UL said...

oh yes, i am smirking :) this was ...*GRIN*

Lucy said...

my smile was rising then it fell then at the end it was rising again! :))